Today I'd like you to use the vocabulary you generated yesterday to edit and improve a piece of writing that, quite frankly, has far too much repetition in it!
First, can you highlight the words or phrases that have been repeated unnecessarily?
After that, can you use yesterday's ideas to replace those words with alternatives (including some pronouns)?
I've attached the document as a PDF and a word document today. It has double spaced lines so you can cross words out and write alternatives above. If you don't have a printer, you can edit the document on your computer or tablet (if possible). It saves you writing it all out
If you can, send me a picture of your improved writing on the blog or e-mail a copy to Mr Farrell and he will forward it to me.